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[aaabbbcde] 【绿苑心宫】(第七章突生变故)

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文学作者区又多了一篇值得追的文啊,描写和架构都很喜欢。
但写了7章,基本把人物性格交代清楚了的,只有配角乌龟和玉琴。反倒是主角们,都是简简单单几笔带过,没有事件的陪衬。吴雨即使有一场肉戏,人物形象也感觉不够立体。还有两个母亲互相之间的仇恨,父子情、兄弟亲甚至兄弟恨也需要LZ以后加以描写,以使人物立体。
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  • BUXING 金币 +7 鼓励 2011-7-28 19:58

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